The Fox's Frolic- Critiques wanted

Two furs, Hunter and Noxy, sit on the soft warm beach- their house not but a hundred yards behind them- relaxing under the sun and enjoying each others company, and doing what they would do on any regular Friday afternoon: listen to the sound of the waves as they hit the shore, feel the nice ocean breeze as it blows through their fur, feel the crystalline sand between their toes, and take in the moment as they gaze into their mate's eyes~


Hunter: "Ukochany? Sweetheart?"
*Hunter turns and looks innocently at his mate to see if Noxy looks back at him to answer*

Noxy: *Noxy looks back at him, deeply into his eyes*

"Yes, skarbie?"

Hunter: *smiles warmly*
"What is your favorite thing about this place- about the beach?"
*He holds Noxy's returning gaze for a split moment*


Noxy: "You, my dear!" *The kitsune playfully kisses his hyena's brown-furred cheek*

Hunter: *He blushes, accepts his partner's cute gesture, and then reaches down to hold Noxy's hand. He feels the gold ring wrapped safely and forever around his mate's finger. Smiling up once again at his husband, Hunter thoughtfully says~"

"There are a lot of fish in this sea, kochanie, but you're by far the best catch this fisherman could have caught."

*Hunter sighs and looks from Noxy to the azure ocean as a few gulls fly overhead*
"I'm so corny and unoriginal... I can never come up with anything romantic to say to you, uko'.

Noxy: "No... You're so cute! I think it's adorable what you said to me."
*Noxy now also blushes and then giggles*
*They both sit there a while, thinking about one another and the life they now happily share*




Hunter: *Hunter chuckles to himself as his train of thought switches tracks and he thinks about how hard the day at work was for him, but how relaxed he now was while sitting next to his soul-mate and enjoying the evening. He calmly continues to watch the waves as two of the seagulls swoop down and start to fight over something they must have seen and both wanted*
*Hunter, under his breath~*

"Foolish birds...."

Noxy: *Noxy, thinking the same thing at the same time, bursts out laughing at the fact Hunter voiced his displeasure with the general idiocy the gulls always portrayed where they lived. He liked to think that their gulls were just a bit dumber than the gulls down the beach*


*A minute or so of tangible silence between the two furs passes after Noxy's outburst*
Hunter: *Hunter smiles, imagining how he would be satisfied the rest of his days even if all he could hear was his little kitsune's laugh and he was cursed to be deaf to the rest of the world- it would be a blessing in his eyes, not a curse...*



*Hunter breaks the natural sublimity of the moment- his voice more soothing than normal, however, but still genuine all the same~*
"Your laugh, uko'...."
*Hunter pauses to find the right word*
"... it's so full of joy. I'd say it's one of the things I love most about you, dear.‏" *A shimmer of light crosses his eye*



*one of the gulls wins the dispute and flies off, whatever prize that was won safely within its beak*



Noxy: Oh stop it, you... *The playful fox blushes and then wraps his hand around Hunter's neck*

Hunter: *Hunter turns to see Noxy's face become roseate for a brief second, then he looks back out to sea as he feels Noxy's fur against his neck and as he sees his mate's hand by his shoulder in his peripheral. He then leans in towards Noxy, wrapping his own arm around the kitsune's much thinner neck*
*Noxy begins to make a slight purring sound in pleasure as Hunter kisses him on the neck and says~*

"I love you..."

*Hunter then brushes his cheek up against Noxy's head as they both look across the beach, Hunter thinking of how lucky of a hyena he really is to have this fox sitting beside him now*

Noxy: *Noxy turns and whispers into Hunter's ear~*
"I love you too, my dearest sweetheart..." *He then hugs the spotted canine in a tight but gentle embrace*

Hunter: *Hunter smiles as he hears the sweet voice he knows and loves so well whisper such words to him*
(I'm one lucky bastard.... that's for sure.)‏
*He pulls Noxy in as he kisses the fox on his forehead this time. Noxy does the same back, lightly kissing the thin fur above Hunter's hazel eyes. They both smile and cuddle there on the sandy beach in each others arms, in love, and not just any 'in love', but the 'in love' that would never end sorta' 'in love'*



*The heat of the day is starting to wane as the afternoon wears on and the sun slowly begins its decent upon the horizon. A few kids play in the water further down the beach, their laughter being audible even where the two lovers lay on their beach towels enjoying the surreal view of the Pacific and of each other.*


Hunter: (laughter, now that's something I also love... just not as much as I do my fox)
"You know? I wouldn't trade you for the world, ukochany."

*Hunter smirks and draws in a deep breath*‏
"Because...."


Noxy: "Because of what, Hunty?"

Hunter: "...Without you, I would have no world worth living in, dear."
*He suddenly feels at peace with life, as though his mate is the answer to all things, feeling internally as though he has finally found his place in the world. Hunter snuggles in closer with Noxy as he nuzzles the fox's little, wet nose with his own*

Noxy: "That's... that's beautiful, Skarbie... I'm not sure how to respond."

*He accepts Hunter's nuzzle and nuzzles back, then looks into his mate's eyes. His own eyes are starting to shine with green light just like two little night lamps. The fox thinks about how much he wants to sit on Hunter's knees and get closer to his mate, assuming that his mate desires to do the same*



Hunter: *He teasingly smiles at Noxy*
"You wanted to get closer didn't you?"
*Hunter laughs as he looks at his mate's face, trying to make out what the expression on it meant exactly, but knowing to at least some extent the want Noxy had on his mind [and knowing about this petite little fox's wants more so than any other person would have wanted to know of]*

Noxy: "Yeah I did" *Noxy smiles, hiding his true feelings behind his apparent innocence*

Hunter: *The hyena snickers*
"Let's just watch the sunset for now, Ukochany."

*He looks into those emerald eyes even more passionately, trying to perceive the answer to why this fox here would even want him*
(Love, that's it... and that's why. Why would I ever think that it wasn't? Love can even make a fat dog like me look good, I guess)

*Hunter quickly comes back to the present and the real, saying~*
"Don't worry, though, there's a season and an hour for everything hun."


*He lets off a half smile and winks at the fox, as his mate giggles at the thought*

Noxy: "...Okay hun."
*He comes closer to Hunter and hugs him tighter while looking at the setting sun*




*After a moment of absorbing the view just a bit more, he turns back to his partner and says~*
"You know, this sunset is not as pretty as you. I want to look at you more‏..."

*Noxy lets out a short 'gruff' as he bases his head on Hunter's shoulder. He rubs his lover's torso as he snuggles against the hyena's spotted back*

Hunter: *Hunter, despite being about as relaxed as he could get, tries to suppress another snicker*
"I already have my shirt off, hun... What more could you want to see? Hmm?"


*He turns back to kiss Noxy on the cheek and tilts his head in, leaning on his partner's as the mango colored sun sets yet further, casting the few clouds in the sky with a hue of colors varying as much as those of a glorious rainbow*

"You talk too sweet to me, Nox.... You know that?" *Hunter grins*

Noxy: "Yes, I know that, skarbie‏... Wiem, I know."

Hunter: *He reaches over his shoulder and teasingly plays with Noxy's blue-dyed hair as he sighs, letting out some of the calm affection built up within his chest*‏

(I love it when he calls me that... "Skarbie"- "baby" So sweet to me... too sweet to me....)

Noxy: *giggles in amusement as Hunter plays with his hair, twisting one of the short curls just under the base of an ear* *As the sun finally is just about even with the distant waves, Noxy starts to shiver*
*The cold wind hits his back so he hugs Hunter yet tighter to warm himself up*

Hunter: "You cold, ukochany?" *Hunter sensitively asks his mate, feeling the breeze himself as well*

Noxy: "Yes I'm cold, dear... "

*The Kitsune shivers as his white, pointed teeth chatter together*

Hunter: *Hunter turns to look back at the house then back to his lover~* "Well, are you ready to go inside and get something to eat, kochanie? The sunset was beautiful, but I'm starting to get a bit cold myself!"

*Hunter looks questioningly at Noxy, only wanting to do the thing that will most please him*

Noxy: "Yes, that sounds like a good idea, hun! I'm starving and freezing out here..." *He still shivers as he strengthens his grip around Hunter in an affectionate hug*

Hunter: "Then let's go in."
*He squeezes the fox back with his own hug and then motions towards the house*
"Here, let me carry in the things."


*Hunter lets go of Noxy as he starts to get up and collect the few things they had brought out with them earlier for the evening. He rolls up his towel that he had been laying on as he reaches out his paw to help Noxy to his feet*

Noxy: *Noxy meets his husband's hand and slowly stands up, a bit of sand falling from his tail which had been partially in the sand*

Hunter: "Let me get your towel too, dearest..."
*Hunter reaches down, getting Noxy's towel and tucking both under his left arm as he holds Noxy's hand with his free one. Then he gives Noxy a quick kiss on the cheek before they both start to head back up to the stilted, banana-yellow house*‏



Noxy: *Noxy holds Hunter's hand as they walk and he thinks about what else they could do this evening. Obviously eat some supper since they both were more than hungry, but then the rest of the evening is completely open to whatever the two 'boys' should happen to choose. And.... tomorrow's Saturday, which means they could sleep in late*

*Noxy's smiling lips then begin to devilishly curl upwards by his cheeks, revealing a few of his canines as he realizes what he himself just internally implied*
(I'm so devious... too much for my own good some days)
*Noxy hides the thought down inside, saving those ideas for later when they'd both be in the mood for such activities*



As they trek across the sand over the short distance to the house's base, the wind blows through the leaves of the palms and the underbrush at the foot of the trees. The stars have just started to become visible and the moon presides over the sparkling subjects within his waxing kingdom as the gulls disappear to their nests and as the furs, with the arrival of dusk, head to their own.



Hunter: "You know why I like the color of our house so much, Nox?"

Noxy: *Noxy blushes as Hunter kisses him and then asks his mate in response~* "Why?‏"
*He lets out a brief and airy giggle*

Hunter: "Because it makes me think about something else that I like, dear, that's this color as well..."

"Can you guess what it is?"
*Hunter cackles with pleasure at the action of making Noxy guess*


*The two reach the steps that lead up to the house's back porch and begin the short ascent*‏

Noxy: "Let me ask one question first, though... a hint per se..."

Hunter: "Sure, go ahead an' shoot..."
*a wolfish grin appears on Hunter's face as he anticipates what his partner's question might probably be and how he'd want to answer*

Noxy: *Looks annoyed at the sight of his partner being so amused with something so.... childish as what could no doubt be a dirty joke*
"I'm going to go out on a limb here... is it a fruit?"

Hunter: *Giggling with excitement, he manages to get out a~* "Perhaps...."

*Then, whispering into Noxy's ear~* "You should know, silly, it's bananas... I love the god damn things." *He raises an eyebrow*
*Standing there beside the fox, the hyena cracks up laughing before suddenly calming down and looking straight at the kitsune*

"But, seriously dear, I love fucking bananas- one in particular...‏"
*Noxy smirks and waits for more bullshit to come out of the mutt's lips- the mutt that he loves so very... very much*

"And I love our house because the sight of that creamy... yellow, paint job makes it so that I can't possibly help but think of that lovely little fruit we call 'the banana' every time I walk up to the door..."
*Hunter practically hisses the last few words as they roll off his tongue and as Noxy rolls his eyes at the snickering hyena before him*


Noxy: "Just open the door, you cackling fool... you'll get your damn fruit later."

Hunter: *licks his lips* "With pleasure, dear sir!"
*mockingly bows, extending his arm to reach and pull the door open. Hunter then waves Noxy in and says~ *

"After you, kind gentleman... *coughs* or should I say ma'... dam?"

Noxy: "You just keep thinking that... We'll see who gets to be the ma'dam later, but with your instant switch of behavior... Hmmm, I'm just not entirely sure who that will be. Maybe we should flip a coin here in a bit? One of us calls top, and the other calls bottom? Winner even gets to keep their side of the coin..." *Noxy teasingly looks at his spouse who he knows is probably starting to salivate at the notion*


Hunter: *The hyena grins and follows his seme [most of the time] inside their home* *He looks down and mumbles under his breath~*

"That tail... Mmmm, ' can't wait to feel what's just below it later if I win heads...."

Noxy: "What was that, dearest? Did you say something?"
*He leans around and looks at Hunter as the door creeks shut behind the uke's rear*

Hunter: "No no, nothing at all..."
"Musta' been the sound of the door shutting behind me."

Noxy: "Uh-huh? Is that so?"
*Noxy looks suspiciously at Hunter, one eye opened wider in jest*

"Well, yes, I'm sure it was... "
*He turns around and struts into the living room. Calling back to Hunter he says~* "Ey! You should get that damn screwdriver of yours, skarbie, and one of these days try and tighten that door up on the hinges, you know? I just now thought of that."

Hunter: "'Ey!' right back at you, love! I'll get around to it eventually- don't worry, ukochany, I will..."
*A more than dirty image pops up within his mind as laughs to himself and goes to join Noxy in the other room*

~Fin~

END OF SCENE ONE





Be sure to check out the links at the top of the journal if you enjoyed the read! Noxy and I have decided that any further RP stories or scenes will strictly be uploaded to my Furaffinity account- due to the content and nature of the stories. One of the links takes you to my account, while the other takes you to Noxy's gallery here on dA where you can check out some of his lovely and furry artwork! Thanks for the read, and we hope that you follow us through the rest of "The Fox's Frolic" and that you enjoy our story!

Heads up for those who desire to know where this story is going:
Scene 1: on the beach, playful
Scene 2: in the house, romantic
Scene 3: in the bedroom, sexy
Scene 4: pups, shield your eyes

Our story will progressively get more mature in content with each scene.
Please keep this in mind as you read.
I'll post a link in a dA journal to each scene as they are posted to FA.
This way, its easier for you to follow if you so desire to do so, friend.
Finally, have a lovely day, you!

~Sage, Hunty

Kocham cie, skarbie! <3
I can't wait to write scene # 2 with you!
I especially can't wait for Scenes 3 and 4